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Andy Murray Promotes Barclays ATP World Tour Finals At O2
Group A

(1) Roger Federer

Twin motives remind
The king, that win, draw, or lose,
Love still waits at home.

(4) Andy Murray


Irked by the sense
Of being discounted, eclipsed
London is his chance.

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Comment by tennischick on November 20, 2009 at 7:41pm
Sounds good!

I have a previous haiku thread (2008) on women's tennis fashion that I put a lot of work into. Do check it out.
Comment by Mark / The Mayor on November 20, 2009 at 6:56pm
This is such a good idea, I'm going to start a Haiku thread in the Forum which will last in perpetuity. I'll post the thread here so that you can add your haikus and we can get the ball rolling there!
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Comment by tennischick on November 20, 2009 at 5:03pm
Very good!!!! You're a natural at this. I hope others start posting theirs as well!

It is a hard and fast rule. so I could have re-written the Djoko one like this:

Irked by the sense of
Being discounted, eclipsed
London is his chance.

I elected to put the word "of" in the second line because it fit more smoothly there. But a really good haiku captures the thought or idea without having to bend the rules.
Comment by Mark / The Mayor on November 20, 2009 at 9:05am
The Joker no more
Please take me seriously
So call me Nole
Comment by Mark / The Mayor on November 20, 2009 at 9:02am
Oh, sounds like you know more about haiku than me - I thought it was a hard and fast rule 5-7-5, at least that's what they follow on the Jim Rome show. ;-) So sad that my current literary knowledge is coming from sports radio - ouch!

Looks like you have a 5-7-5 and a 4-8-5 there, at least with my pronunciation.

Let me try one.

Scramble for the top
The king's crown is tarnished
Now London's Calling
Comment by tennischick on November 20, 2009 at 5:16am
It's 5, 7, 5. Sometimes for the natural beat/cadence you end up doing 5, 8, 4 or 4, 8, 5, but it should always add up to 17 beats/syllables for the entire haiku. I don't think I broke this rule but I will re-check and change if I did.
Comment by Mark / The Mayor on November 20, 2009 at 12:38am
Very cool idea - so is it supposed to be 4 or 5 syllables in the first line - cuz you got one of each. ;-)

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