The London draw, in haiku

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Comment by tennischick on November 20, 2009 at 7:41pm

Sounds good!

I have a previous haiku thread (2008) on women's tennis fashion that I put a lot of work into. Do check it out.

Comment by Mark / The Mayor on November 20, 2009 at 6:56pm

This is such a good idea, I'm going to start a Haiku thread in the Forum which will last in perpetuity. I'll post the thread here so that you can add your haikus and we can get the ball rolling there!
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Comment by tennischick on November 20, 2009 at 5:03pm

Very good!!!! You're a natural at this. I hope others start posting theirs as well!

It is a hard and fast rule. so I could have re-written the Djoko one like this:

Irked by the sense of
Being discounted, eclipsed
London is his chance.

I elected to put the word "of" in the second line because it fit more smoothly there. But a really good haiku captures the thought or idea without having to bend the rules.

Comment by Mark / The Mayor on November 20, 2009 at 9:05am

The Joker no more
Please take me seriously
So call me Nole

Comment by Mark / The Mayor on November 20, 2009 at 9:02am

Oh, sounds like you know more about haiku than me - I thought it was a hard and fast rule 5-7-5, at least that's what they follow on the Jim Rome show. ;-) So sad that my current literary knowledge is coming from sports radio - ouch!

Looks like you have a 5-7-5 and a 4-8-5 there, at least with my pronunciation.

Let me try one.

Scramble for the top
The king's crown is tarnished
Now London's Calling

Comment by tennischick on November 20, 2009 at 5:16am

It's 5, 7, 5. Sometimes for the natural beat/cadence you end up doing 5, 8, 4 or 4, 8, 5, but it should always add up to 17 beats/syllables for the entire haiku. I don't think I broke this rule but I will re-check and change if I did.

Comment by Mark / The Mayor on November 20, 2009 at 12:38am

Very cool idea - so is it supposed to be 4 or 5 syllables in the first line - cuz you got one of each. ;-)